Table 7 Body paragraphs of the essay written by Student 50 (left) and raters’ comments (right)

First, it is future dream. I have a dream. I want to be a botanist. But it have the problem that I am not good at speaking and writing English. For, botanist should read many book that are read English and speak my researches in English.

Second, it is owe to future to enjoy. I went to Australia three years ago. However, I could not speak English well. So I want to revenge. And I want to go abroad because of studying science. Foreign countries have many animals and nature. I have ever seen foreign countries nature because I still stayed home in Australia. So I want to a lot of nature.

Third, it is what I make my friends. I have a few friends. So I want to make friends of alien. And I want to speak English with. And I want to discuss science in English.

1. These opinions bear no relation to the question, so it’s hard to rate the response for critical thinking. The writer has not appropriately engaged with the topic. (R2)

2. Again, these ideas are basic and universal, thus the average rating of 3. (R4)